“He’s having a hard time in school again. I don’t know how to handle him,” I say, but you aren’t speaking to me. Cold and distant, you’ve turned your back.
“I need some help,” I plead, hoping to hear your words, wishing for some advice, but you left angry. Silence is my reward for having hurt you.
“I’m sorry,” I whisper, trying to hold back tears, trying to be strong like you would want.
I stand, exhaling and steadying myself. I touch you as I walk away. Your cold granite skin is all that’s left for me to hold on to.
So many emotions in so few words. Well done.
Thank you for reading.
I feel like you were talking about the statue of my father. Made of clay, by my own hands, when I was eight. Your story evoked a lot of feelings.
Thanks you for reading. I’m glad you connected with the story.
powerfully sad. i feel the hurt.
well done.
Thank you for reading Debbie.
David, that’s terrific mate. Looking forward to more.
Thanks Don!
Excellent. So much portrayed in so few words. Well done.
Thanks Ed.
What a heartbreak!
Thank you Shoshauna, I appreciate you taking the time to read it.
That’s powerful. Well done!
Thank you Emma.
Oh dear! This is painful!
Thank you Wiam, I appreciate the feedback.
The real story is what is behind the untold part in this short story. I like the way you immediately get the reader to focus on what you have to say. Great piece of work…
Thank you for the feedback, I’m glad you enjoyed it.
Good story. Evoked emotion and said just enough to let the reader fill in the blanks.
Good story. Evoked emotion and said just enough for the reader to fill in all the blanks
Thanks Jake!