He stepped over the black-clad figures slumped by the door and peered into the dark hall. All was quiet. Turning, he assessed the destruction behind him and knew there’d be hell to pay.
There always was.
But this was his life. A life of danger. Of justice. Of fighting scumbags like these, whether in sweltering jungles or ramshackle joints like this.
And he loved it.
A distant voice broke his reverie. It was a voice he knew well, one he couldn’t ignore. Dropping his sword, he ran through the doorway.
Today, his mom was making grilled cheese.
He LOVED grilled cheese.
Good one, Phil.
Great suprise with that ending. I was ready to do battle and right all wrongs along side this grilled cheese lover. You captured my attention and took me on a journey with your character. Thanks.
A swashbuckling adventure, a brave hero, and an ending with a twist. What’s not to love? Great story!
So fun! Love the surprise ending! (And I love the boy who inspired it)!
Thanks for all the feedback! Appreciate it very much.
This is a wonderful piece. Great description of the hero’s assessment of his life of danger then the twist! It makes you go back and reread and appreciate how well you capture – and make us remember! – the seriousness with which little kids take/view their lives. I loved it!
Thank you for the feedback, Pamela! It means a lot that you liked the story!