By Ken Towl
In the sculpture museum of Valladolid, the assorted polychromatic saints and saviours gurned in agony or reposed in ecstasy on their crosses, all of them naked but for their wooden loincloths.
Thus, when he came across a crucified woman, he was struck by the fact that she was clothed in a pretty high-collared dress. He checked the information plate to the side of the cross: Santa Eulalia, martyred at the age of thirteen.
There was, he thought, some small comfort in speculating that the Roman executioner, embarrassed at punishing a child, had at least let her die in her favourite smock.
Excellent.
Brilliant creation! Each of the 101 words is like a pointillist teasingly revealing a masterpiece stroke-by-stroke.
Thank you.
Exactly what Michael Slagle said! Well done! I can learn from that.
What a lovely comment! Thank you!
Outstanding. I am impressed.
Oh boy, that got me.
Loved it! The last line nailed it all!
Thank you.
“Nailed it!” I am still wondering if, considering that the 101 woerds describes a crucifixion, if your choice of words was deliberate.
Outstanding!
This is sheer brilliance. ? ?
Hi Johnson, Your comment is very encouraging. Thank you.
That was no little effort. Brilliant.
Hi Cheryl. Yes, very short story but it took a lot of work.
Hello,
I totally agree with Lakshmy about the fantastic twist at the end!
The problem for me was the polysyllabic, verbose opening lines with several descriptive elements that could have been eliminated (just as my overwrought sentence should be edited!!!).
Hi Cathryn, I am not sure why I would want to eliminate description or be monosyllabic. A matter of taste, I suppose.
Superb. Thank you.