By Bob Allen
She always said it when she experienced something satisfying.
“That was a most best thing.”
When she saw a good movie, had a delicious meal, heard a great song, had really good sex. It was “a most best thing.”
I suppose that what I did was wrong. Hurt her deeply. I was sorry. Didn’t like to hurt her. I felt something. Remorse.
She came to me with a big smile on her face. Her eyes were shining. She was beautiful.
When she plunged the butcher knife into my chest, the last thing I heard was: “That was a most best thing.”
Oooh, loved the final “twist”! Great job.
Great satisfying ending.
i liked this one very much.
Ouch! Didn’t see that one coming! Good job, Bob.
In order to pull off a successful “twist” it’s essential that there be some foreshadowing; otherwise it’s just a sentence tacked on at the end.