By Guy S. Ricketts
Their breakup affects him profoundly.
It is most fortuitous that an experimental device was developed to send people back, theoretically speaking, up to five years into the past. Gus reads enough positive testimonials to give it a try. When the device finally arrives, he uses it successfully.
The day of their original meeting comes and goes. She walks by, he hesitates; they don’t speak. He gathers the courage to meet her a few days later, but Amy rejects him this time.
Boy, when that lousy company opens up in a few years, he is going to leave them one nasty testimonial!
Surely he would only travel back to the event which led to the breakup, not to before the start of the relationship? Present tense is a wonderful opportunity to make a story more vital. It’s where “showing” works best – introducing the immediacy of sensations.
Loved it!
Thank you!
Even good news travels fast in reverse, or something like that.
Ha! Fun read.
I wondered if Amy had also got the machine and gone back in time, rejecting him this time…??? Enjoyed it!
Clever, using time re the company failure. Don’t investors wish to travel back to before share market crash…