When the bombs fell, my friend Erin had been telling me one of her disaster dating stories.
Erin was one of those women who are always ahead of the curve: the first one to get a boyfriend, the first one to get a job, the first one to buy an apartment. By the time she was thirty, she had two kids and a stellar career where she’d already hit the glass ceiling. When I got married and had a baby, she was divorced and back on the dating market.
So when the bombs fell, naturally, she was the first to go.
Perfectly done.
Thanks so much! That means a lot 🙂
Really enjoyed this!
Glad to hear that, Laura ?
The system somehow made a smiley 🙂 into a ?
Wonderful!
Thank you for reading and letting me know!
Great story, greater ending. Kudos.
Thanks so much! The endings are the best part, aren’t they 🙂
Thanks so much, that means a lot!
Hello Lena,
A perfect piece of flash writing exhibiting both dynamite plotting and skillful sentence structure. The tie-in of the beginning and the ending is a clever writing technique.
Kudos to you,
Cathryn
Enjoyed the lightly sarcastic, envious narrator’s voice, too.
Thanks so much for your thoughtful feedback, Cathryn!
Excellent
Thank you!
Wow! That was very original and fantastic! Well done!
Thanks so much! Glad you liked it 🙂
Liked the parallel opening and closing–and the devastating content. Well done!
Thanks so much for noticing, I love a good structure 🙂
Big fan of the Twilight Zone genre. Well done.
Thanks so much, Carolyn 🙂 now that you mention it, I think it’s time for a Twilight Zone re-watch!
I loved the narrator’s voice—that sarcastic bite was great!
Thanks so much for letting me know, Yolanda! Glad you liked it!
I enjoyed the read… well chosen words and structure … kudos … you got my attention…
Thanks so much for letting met know, Valli! Glad to hear the story stood out for you.
Ooh! Wasn’t expecting that!
Congratulations ?
I meant Congratulations!
Thanks so much! Good to hear you didn’t expect the ending, it’s so difficult to surprise an experienced reader/writer.
Well written. Well concluded
Whoa!!! Didn’t see that ending coming. Took me by surprise. I like that in a piece.
Good job!
Wow ! Great story !
Worth the muse. Great!
Yes. Created a feeling of satisfaction of justice served.