By N. Comly
Two kids.
A club meeting. Eyes across the room. An introduction. A laugh. The walk back to the dorms. A plan to meet.
5:30. The drive to town. Things in common. An inside joke. Two hands warmed in one pocket.
Three months. Her favorite restaurant. Hands held across a table. Kisses at stoplights on the drive home.
Six months. A promise. Heart to heart.
One year. Talks about the future. Tears.
Radio silence.
Four months. A phone call. Two overeager ears, but no resolution.
She imagines:
Two adults.
A spontaneous text.
The decision to get coffee.
A possibility. An unwritten ending.
I liked the pacing and anticipation of the next move. The ending was hopeful.
Nice piece!
The short sentences are very effective. Great story!
Like how the short, punchy sentences build up, descend, and return to possibilities again. Impressive use of 101 words.