Jonathan entered Apartment 4B and felt immediately at ease. Heather’s apartment was meticulously clean and uncluttered.
Jonathan was a clean freak. Most of his relationships ended because the other person wasn’t. He knew he was odd, but couldn’t help himself. It was a lonely way to be.
Heather served a simple pasta dish, salad, and wine. The meal was delicious—she was tidy and could cook! Jonathan started to feel optimistic about Heather. About a possible future.
Just then, Jonathan noticed a long, dark hair mixed with the pasta on his fork.
He quietly excused himself and left apartment 4B forever.
Great.
Liked the ending–because that’s really the only way it could have ended!
Though he left because it was completely in line with his character, I would have liked to see him overcome that flaw he recognizes and stay. Because he mentions he’s lonely, he wants to overcome the neat-freak-ness, and wouldn’t that have been the perfect opportunity to do so?
Thanks – funny to hear this because it had originally been in my head to go that direction but as I got writing the story took over and went its own way!