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Asylum

November 16, 2018 19 Comments

Asylum

By David Batteiger

I stop only a fleeting moment. Short, sharp breaths fill my lungs and I try to catch them. My jittery eyes dart around, continually searching for my pursuers. I spot one; his hungry gaze bearing down on me. Anxious arms stretch out as he sprints in my direction. My feet kick up dust as I zag away from his clumsy attempt to capture me.

This chase seems eternal but deep inside I know I’ll lose. But I can still hope. There is salvation. The myth we all know—the president will pardon one of us for Thanksgiving. It could be me.

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  1. cascondaville says

    November 16, 2018 at 7:28 am

    Oh! From that perspective it is terrifying!

    Reply
    • David Batteiger says

      November 16, 2018 at 12:01 pm

      Thank you!

      Reply
  2. Ed Kratz says

    November 16, 2018 at 9:36 am

    Well done.

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    • David Batteiger says

      November 16, 2018 at 12:01 pm

      Thanks Ed, appreciate all of the support.

      Reply
  3. Jake says

    November 16, 2018 at 11:23 am

    Good story, kept me engaged and paid off at the end.

    Reply
    • David Batteiger says

      November 16, 2018 at 12:02 pm

      Thanks Jake. Glad you enjoyed it.

      Reply
  4. Dianne Duffy Moritz says

    November 16, 2018 at 12:24 pm

    very funny, good and exciting, kept me guessing!

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    • David Batteiger says

      November 16, 2018 at 5:57 pm

      Thank you Dianne, much appreciated.

      Reply
  5. Brian says

    November 16, 2018 at 5:04 pm

    The story captivated me, the ending made me laugh. Excellent work!

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    • David Batteiger says

      November 16, 2018 at 5:57 pm

      Thanks Brian – I’m glad I could give you a laugh,

      Reply
  6. Paula Edwards says

    November 16, 2018 at 8:50 pm

    Really liked the perspective.

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    • David Batteiger says

      November 19, 2018 at 8:20 am

      Thank you Paula.

      Reply
  7. Susan says

    November 16, 2018 at 11:37 pm

    Great story! I thoroughly enjoyed it.

    Reply
    • David Batteiger says

      November 19, 2018 at 8:19 am

      Thank you very much for the kind words Susan.

      Reply
  8. Daniel Connelly says

    November 17, 2018 at 10:07 am

    Fantastic! I love the “jittery eyes”.

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    • David Batteiger says

      November 19, 2018 at 8:19 am

      Thank you Daniel. Yes, I’ve always felt certain birds have shaky, jittery eyes…

      Reply
      • taekwondocathy says

        November 20, 2018 at 10:17 am

        What an awesome perspective. Thanks, David!

        Reply
  9. Susan says

    November 21, 2018 at 6:49 pm

    Writing your story from the turkey’s perspective was clever.

    Reply
  10. David Derey says

    December 10, 2018 at 4:23 pm

    Good stuff!

    Reply

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