Todd panted by the riverbank. “Good thing I was here… Eh, Bobby?”
“Who are you? Why did you save me?”
“I had to. Your sister would be mad at me if I did nothing.”
“Wait, you know my sister?”
Todd raised his eyebrow. “You don’t know me? I’m Todd, I’m dating your sister.”
Bobby opened his mouth, but no words followed. Flashbacks of a cemetery jolted in front of him. “Where did you meet my sister?” he asked.
Todd smiled. “Online—she rang me on Skype last night.”
Someone was playing a cruel online prank. “Todd, Kathleen died ten years ago.”
Now that is a plan I could live with.
Thank you so mcuh Dante.
The twist at the end is surprising, but perfectly explains the confusion originally presented.
Thank you so much Michelle.
Surprising twist. Well written.
Thank you, Emma!
This made me really sad. Great set up!
Thank you so much.
Well done!
Good start to a story, but a big gaping hole. It’s okay to allow readers to fill in minor gaps, but asking them to create the main story is too much.