By Caleb Echterling
“Baby girl!” Joyce’s screams bounced down the stairs. “There’s a drowned rat in my shower.” Joyce rounded the corner wrapped in a towel that flapped open at the waist.
“Mother!” Sarah yelled. “Please wear clothes.”
“It’s my house; I’ll do what I want. Go get rid of the rat.”
“Get dressed, Mom.” Sarah’s voice raised twenty decibels and lowered one octave. “Chuck, honey, did you clean the drain after your shower?”
“I didn’t realize there would be a quiz.”
“Your mother-in-law thinks we have vermin, and I think we have a male pattern baldness sufferer. You get to settle the bet.”
Delicious story. Wasn’t sure where it was going; loved where it ended up.
Great buildup, nice twist.
Enjoyed the humor brought out so stunningly at the end.
Clever and funny. It is interesting to see how you can get character sketches–of three people–in just 101 words.
Amazing how dense 101 words and the author can be. I could hear their voices and see their expressions. “20 decibels and 1 octave.” Love it.
Love the ending!!
Great story! Loved the ending> Very entertaining!
An entire story in 101 words–well thought out and meticulously crafted.