By Stacy Hall
Organ music accompanied her long march down the aisle. Everyone glared. They didn’t want her there. It didn’t matter. Only the polished box mattered.
Her avoiding eyes flitted everywhere before she could convince herself to look. Eric seemed strange in a suit, but no stranger than he seemed in a church. The stench of a hundred roses made her wheezy. She scowled at the array of formal blossoms; their drama was so unlike him.
Time was short. Behind her, someone coughed a warning.
She bent low, whispering her goodbye to the man nobody else here had known.
“You would’ve hated this.”
Very nice… Clever, and yes he would’ve hated it…in more than one way, I’m sure.
Really thought provoking but SO relatable. I hated it for him however she had to endure. Well written.
A very neat slice-of-life short short. Exceptionally well done.
Such meaning! Love it.
Drama all the way to the grave (sigh). Heavy but not heavy-handed. Can’t wait to read more from this author!
Not sure if the roses are meant to be literal or figurative–interesting how they sort of work both ways simultaneously. Obviously still thinking about this story…
seems so sad to me, but well written
Well done. Very visual.
Can’t stop thinking about this story. Dark but yet compelling
Love it! Very nicely done!
Sometimes I wonder who the funeral is really for . . . the deceased or the family.
Mystery and drama. Always interesting to read between the lines, and the different interpretations.
I’m waiting for more, nicely done.
I can relate to this. Well done, so much thought put into this short story. He definitely would have hated it.. It left me wanting to know more..
Enjoyed your short drama. Was well written.
Short yet tells a story. Makes you “feel” for them. Some people will connect with this. Looking forward to reading more!
Great beginning, middle and end in only 101 words. Good punch at the end. Looking forward to reading more from this author.
Stacy, I really liked it and it left me wanting more. Your so talented to be able to give a great picture of what your expressing in only 101 words. Awesome job to do that, keep up the great job and best wishes on your continued success. Well Done.