By Angie Dent
Callum tiptoed towards the edge. Clammy palms clutching the rusty railing, he peered cautiously down into the murky water. Unrecognisable objects were torn apart in the angry rapids. He would fare no better.
He teetered on the edge, heart thumping. The relentless drudgery of empty days and sleepless nights would soon end. With relief, he closed his eyes, took a deep breath…
and jumped.
Just before he struck the water, he shot upwards bullet-like, feet first, as if the heavens were yanking him back from death.
Climbing back onto the bungee platform, he laughed in exhilaration, feeling more alive than ever.
Wow I held my breath. You are very good at grabbing the reader instantly. Love it x
Very clever set up and resolution! Not always easy to do in a few words.
Nicely done! You had me going there, feeling sad.
I really like the last line.
Thank you all for reading and your positive comments. Angie
Good job of writing a logical but surprising ending.
Excellent writing.
Excellent.
Really love this! Wasn’t the ending I expected. Made me think of the phrase “bouncing back from rock bottom”. Very clever writing! Xx
I agree with all the comments! This is great writing! WTG!
Wow! You had me going. I was ready for a horrible ending. I’m so happy he was saved. Great job!
Great writing. Perfect for the 101-words structure.
Agree with all of the above comments. Excellent build-up and mood setting. Perfect for this structure!
Perfect!