By Sahana Ahmed
I love it here. Rue de This, Rue de That, Art Deco unlimited. But they let their dogs poop everywhere.
My shoes were Aldo. Ruined now. “Foutre vous!“
A voice protests. Not a dog mom; just some neighborhood nag yelling French things at me.
She is too fast, too loud, my Google français useless.
What’s wrong, is my face too Delhi?
Dress = Zara, jacket = Mango, bag = LV. My fashion’s on point for ze woman, I think.
I let her get closer. Let her see my pearls. She has two of her own.
I sigh, adjust my hijab, and take off my shoes.
Sharp, smooth and subtle all at the same time. Brilliant writing. So precise. The most efficient use of each and every word. The more subtle the words are, the louder the message is coming through. Absolutely marvellous artistry by the author!
Like it. Unusual but the voice comes through. Well done
Beautifully written..
Must be stressful to have to wrap it up in 101 words..
The subject is such that you would wanna say so much..
Yet u say it all in just the 101.
Marvellous.
This is well written. However, it’s a moment, not a story. The character does not change.
Additionally, I’m confused by the placement of “Foutre vous”. Is the main character saying this (if so, to whom is she saying it? If to herself, shouldn’t she only say, “Foutre”? If so, considering her clothing (and the implication of her religion) would she?) … Or is the woman yelling supposed to be saying this? If so, “Foutre vous” should start the next paragraph.
I’m glad to be introduced to this writer. I look forward to reading more of their work.
Ha ha ha. Well done, sis! I can relate to this and to you perfectly. Have shown this to other friends and they were giggling mad.
Brilliant and evocative as usual.
Unusual!
Words used economically and effectively.
Keep writing, Sahana.