By David Lowis
Neil sat down at his monitor at NASA headquarters and eagerly opened the latest image sent by the Mars rover, Perseverance. The planet’s surface, littered with red rock, came into focus. In the distance loomed the hazy rim of the Jezero Crater. He never tired of gazing at the stark scene.
Then, something made Neil’s heart race. Standing near a clump of rocks, about a hundred meters from Perseverance, stood a shadowy, faceless shape. With bulging head and wispy limbs it looked almost human. Neil leaned in close, unaware that he was looking at the last image the rover would transmit.
He never got tired…
Thanks for commenting, Divya. ‘Never tired of’ is grammatically correct, to the best of my knowledge.
yes, nothing wrong with ‘never tired of’ 🙂
Another way of saying the same thing.
With the main character being named Neil – I thought at first it was going to be something about Neil Armstrong landing on the moon. It’s a brilliant flash in so few words!
Yes, I was thinking Neil might be an appropriate name for someone who works at NASA. Thanks so much for your comment.
Love this. So much story in so few words!
Thanks for reading and commenting, DeRicki. I really appreciate it.
I have always enjoyed Sci Fi stories and this one tells the story with an economy of words. Good work.
Thanks, Derek, glad you enjoyed the story.
Great story! Love the twist in th last line. Well done!
Thanks very much for reading and commenting, Melanie.
Nice, gentle start, it got you at the end. Great story, well told.
Thanks Fliss, I appreciate the comment.
A nice little tale… great imagery … the twist ending works well… kudos …
Thanks Valli. I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment.