By Susanna Blagrove
“Elliot? From the hotel’s maintenance department?”
“Same one. Jason Elliot.”
“I danced with him at the last Christmas party.”
“All of us danced with him.”
“He took some days off and only came back this morning.”
“He just went up there and jumped out a window on the eleventh floor.”
“Did you hear he didn’t make a sound all the way down?”
“I heard he had his fingers crossed on both hands.”
“Did he think he was gonna survive it?”
“Someone said his wife left him, took the kids.”
“I heard he owed some people money.”
“He had a beautiful voice.”
I want more. Like seriously, I want more.
:)… that is up to you to write now
Mi curious…what was the prompt/stimuli?
There was none. Just write a story in 101 words.
Somehow I get the feeling he was a life of the party guy, hurting underneath
Moving. I thought the speakers were strong and the emotion even stonger.
Thank you so much, Ed.
Utterly convincing. “(H)e didn’t make a sound all the way down.” Much the same was said of Primo Levi after he ‘jumped.’ And such a fine last line.
Thank you. 🙂
A good portrayal of reactions of colleagues in a work place. Some caring some negative.
Thank you for reading and commenting, Pamela.
Love the dialogue only perspective and that last line fits amazingly with the mention of his silence on the way down. I would question the addition of the crossed fingers in the body and title, but the story reads so well. Great stuff 🙂
It just felt like an odd thing to do, and inexplicable enough to leave even more question. Thank you for reading and for your comment!! 🙂
Well done, a lovely read, thanks for sharing.