By Philip Scholz
With trembling fingers, Dan reached down to his friend’s waist. He heard the urgent radio chatter.
“Suspect is on foot, heading east on Mulberry towards Main.”
His heart racing, Dan began running down Mulberry Street.
He spotted the punk, wearing the black sweatshirt witnesses described. His feet pounding the pavement, Dan caught his quarry, pushing him against a fence, his pistol in his hand.
“Hey!” the kid yelled.
“You killed Joe,” Dan growled through gritted teeth. “I’m gonna finish the job he started.”
He put his gun away and reached for the handcuffs he’d taken from Joe’s belt.
“You’re under arrest.”
Yup… The way things used to be, the way things should be, but – today – PURE fiction. Keep thinking and writing, you’re on the right path.
Although a shattering of expectation is key to good flash fiction writing, you surprised me! And I formed an emotional attachment to your character instanteously. Impressive.
Yup, 101 words. Nice, now you’ve inspired me to try my hand.
Good twist – and good writing. Well done.
Man I love it!
A lot of action in 101 words. Excellent job.
Amazing how much you managed to tell in just 101 words. A great twist, too.