By Susan Morehouse
There are windows in the room, curtainless with wavy glass tucked beneath the sloped ceilings, and cracks between the wide boards that let the moon shine in rivulets across the floor. You lean, naked as a fish, against the wall, doing a handstand to cure hiccups. A leaf sticks to the bottom of your waving foot. I pluck it off and you laugh so hard, the hiccups fall right out of you. We put them, along with the leaf, into the stream of moonlight where they become giant koi, playful as puppies, swimming around the bed, leaping to lick our faces.
Beautifully written, magical, and uplifting!
Thank you, Michael!
So immediate, spare, and beautifully cast!! Just like that old Moon….. Bonnie
Love it! The image is really romantic and childlike.
I’m so glad you love it, Chieh! I’m enjoying your comments on other pieces, too. 🙂
Your imagery brought a smile of wonder to my face, like Dali’s.
Judith, thank you!
Susan,
This was just beautiful. Lovely language.
Thank you, Lisa. I had fun writing it.
Beautiful shape-shifting images! Magical!
Aww. Hi Vicky. Thank you. It actually felt playful to write (unlike a novel, e.g.)
Really like it. Also like the 1-3-1 structure – don’t know if intended (assume yes), but the progression and depiction is very entertaining. Great job – thank you!
Jeremy, thank you. I love your insight about the structure. I’m always thinking about prose rhythm and sound beats and I can see you do, as well. I’m so glad you liked it.
This is lovely, Susan. How many people have ever experienced the beauty of wavy windowpanes creating images on the floor?
Thank you, Cherryl –I love looking at the light in houses, and especially old houses. It IS kind of magical. xox
Oh, my, Susan! The delicacy of the images and the language that enlivens those images is truly magical. Thank you! I love it.
Yay — I was hoping for magical. 🙂 Thanks, Becky!
Glad I circled back to read this, Susan. It is definitely infused with a healthy dose of whimsy— the SPM special kind! Must admit I was left pondering who proposed the hiccup solution. Xox
I confess: I think whimsy is always healthy. Thanks for circling back around, F. xox
This was beautiful. The imagery magical and wonderous!
Thank you, Nina.
This is lovely. I just read it aloud to my wife, and the words felt playful and right out loud. Thank you for this.
Oh, I’m so glad you read it out loud! Thank you, Karen!
Wonderful
Wonderful
Thanks, Hugh. 🙂