By S. Webb
The sun was baking the dirt under his bare feet when Jack Junior tripped over the bloody body. Disturbed in their feast, the flies buzzed angrily in protest. The weapon, a large rock lying next to the head, was covered with gore. There was no mercy from the summer sun and soon the corpse would engorge. Desperate and panicked, Jack enlisted his four brothers with the grisly task of disposing of the body. They buried him deep in the backyard. The years of abuse and misery at the hands of Jack Senior were over, but Momma had disappeared in the night.
The starting lines at the start with flies feasting over the body and the ending lines where boys bury their father’s corpse are awk-striking. Brilliant!
Awesome and gruesome. Sharply done.
Thank you! This submission an excerpt from a full length novel I am working on but I thought it worked well for the 101 submission criteria. The editor was great to work with to make it fit within the confines of 101 words.
Thank you for your reading and your comments. Much appreciated.
Grabs your attention and imagination immediately. Want to read the novel.
Your words are those of a visual artist. Well done
Thank you!
Wow, what a hook! I want to hear more!