By Sean MacKendrick
The tide waters are unseasonably warm. Plastic particulates sparkle in the waves reaching for a pair of shoes perched atop a folded pile of clothes on the beach. A key fob to an electric car sits in one shoe. Bifocals rest in the other.
The ocean won’t take these shoes tonight; a beachcomber will find them in the morning. A boater will find the body later.
Investigators will call it an accident, the result of an ill-advised moonlight swim. That conclusion will be incorrect. The truth is that the rising tide will drown everyone, eventually. Someone simply decided not to wait.
Lovely
Thank you, Michelle!
Brilliant story. Well said. I only wish I’d written it. Well done!
Thank you, Chris!
I searched for more of your stories on this site because I loved this one so much! And loved the one I found just as much. Definitely an author whose work I want to follow!
Wow, thank you, Tamm!
Beautifully written and a great story.
Thank you, Lisa!
Sound like the opening of a great novel.
That’s an interesting thought…
Wow. Left me with icy chills ??
That’s a great reaction. Thank you, Janet!
Perfect story, Lean prose and great imagery like “plastic particulates sparkle,” and the connotative particles reaching for the shoes. Well done.
Thank you very much, Ed!
Well done! Felt like I was there and wanted to stop him… or her.
Thank you, Pat!
This definitely resonates with me.
Poignant. A lot is revealed by the inclusion of bifocals and a key fob to an electric car.
Thank you, Sue!
Every word essential. Final line especially apt. Love the thematic elements. A treat.
The second sentence in the second paragraph grabbed me with chills. Great job.
Contains so much and says equally as much. A powerful final sentence. All comments are well deserved 🙂
So good, wow.