By Syl Gamble
She stared at the image before her, pondering what the artist was envisioning when he made it. “The hips are completely disproportionate,” she thought. Her deep brown eyes traced every outline of the figure, stopping at every pucker and roll to give a look of disapproval.
“Aren’t artists supposed to create beautiful images that people want to see?” she wondered. Her eyebrows furrowed when she gazed upon a large birthmark on the woman’s neck. “How unfortunate,” she whispered to herself. A few seconds passed and she decided that she couldn’t look any longer. She turned from the mirror, crying.
God frowns.
I loved it, all 101 words! Keep writing Syl, you have a big talent!
I enjoyed reading this. I find if I look in the mirror without my glasses I look younger 🙂
Beautifully written!
This is beautifully written and says so much in few words. I really appreciated reading this.
Thank you for writing and making this available to read.
Had to take a look in the mirror after reading this. Another frown! Great story, Syl!
I absolutely love this story. So beautifully written!
Love this Syl! Can’t wait to read more of your work!
Yes, as above, a very good story. I looked back at the title and it all made sense. Really clever and well crafted. I love that the title is the give away, but it doesn’t actually give it away in advance. Well it made me think I just wasn’t observant enough.
Love it. Thank you Syl, I can’t wait to read more of your work!
Sylvia – creating a complete story within the confines of just 101 words, that elicits such a strong emotion is simply outstanding… you are talented in so many ways. Keep stretching out in new directions. Dad.
Simply brilliant. I love this story. Would love to come up with a story as beautiful as this. 🙂
Riveting with a hammer ending. Great job!!
Wow! You truly have a gift. I wanted to apologize again for my remark a while ago. You are a wonderful person and I pray that You fulfill all God has for you. I felt called to make this right again and I know that you may never forgive me or perhaps you don’t remember but I still feel like I need to clear my conscience. It is never acceptable to say something like that about a person… but I hope you know that it was never my intention to hurt you… it was a screwed up and bizarre way for me to express my feelings about you. While this was so long ago I still feel horrible about what I said. Honestly, I was young, jealous, and in “love.” Please forgive me.
Hope our paths one day cross again.
– Mar