He always admired her skill with words, so it was no surprise that the note was economical, precise, and concise. It said: ‘I know that you love me but I no longer love you, so I’ve gone.’
She meant: I no longer love seeing you in the morning when I first wake up; holding your hand over breakfast coffee; hearing the door handle turn when you come home; sharing my meals, my tears and laughter, my past, my present, and my future with you. I no longer love any of these so I’ve gone and, in return, I give you—nothing.
Nice. I felt every bit of that pain oozing into that puddle of nothing – that space where the heart once resided.
Thanks to Roy and B for their comments. Authors really do need feedback.
I am exploring a range of themes with these little stories. In Ricochet (https://101words.org/ricochet) I wanted to look at a very specific act at a precise moment in time – and the consequences.
With Seagull Lunch (https://101words.org/seagull-lunch), I wanted to look at the world through the eyes of a seagull and a hustler too.
In the next two stories I have submitted for consideration by the editors I am looking at black comedy – and the piece is really deep, black – and revenge.
Please keep commenting.
Frank
Nicely done, Frank.
Wow Frank. “I’ve gone” does leave a great big empty. I liked the way you laid out all the things she will be missing. Nicely done!
Wonderful. I love that blunt “I just do not care at all!”) ending.
Thanks again for taking the time to comment. It really is much appreciated and I am delighted that you enjoy these little pieces.
More than anything else, I want each one to draw reach a clear conclusion and this is the great joy of writing for 101.
In “Richochet”, a child dies. With “Seagull” a scavenging bird is overtly disappointed and, in the case of “Good With Words” a relationship is, unambivalently and permanently over.
Thanks again for reading
Frank