By Patricia
He slapped me, HARD! My head jerked right. I gasped in fresh air. I hadn’t been aware of the gas leak. The need to lie down and sleep was overpowering, so I did. He slapped once more. I opened my eyes and saw a blurry, unfamiliar, bearded face framed by the bluest sky I have ever been in love with. The warm green grass under my body felt like heaven. Thank God I was on top and not under it. I may have been if this man intent on burglarizing my home had not dragged me out.
My stuff is yours.
Another fabulous 101 words!
Loved the last line it made me laugh out loud ?
Well done Patricia.
That was lovely – and so well written.
Nice twists.
I liked this story and the twist in the tale.
Hello Patricia.
Great hook and neat twist at the end.
Nice twist
Great hook.
Excellent twist to the story.
Suspense to the last line!!
Truly good writing here. Nicely done! Love the twist!
Good story.
At first I thought this FF was about domestic abuse; it was a thoughtful, redeeming tale. Thank you.
I loved it
Great story with a surprising ending!!! Thanks for sharing, Pat!
This line! “ The warm green grass under my body felt like heaven. Thank God I was on top and not under it.”
So good! Had me hooked.
Each line was masterful – well done Patricia.
You have a wonderful way of offering readers a surprise ending. Love it Patricia!
WOW – so much captured in so few words – loved it!
You have done it again. Well chosen words with a fabulous ending.
LOVE that twist ending — and I want to know more about these two characters! Great job.
hmmm never thought about that..maybe it could become a short story,, thanks for the idea!