By David Derey
Alone by a forest road, he sits in his wrecked sports car, gritting his teeth against the pain.
Twisted inwards by the trunk of a tree, the car door sticks into the side of his body.
Ding! His cell phone nags from the floor.
He looks away, tries to breathe.
Ding!
He begins to laugh hysterically.
Ding!
The laugh becomes a choke as blood trickles from his mouth.
The phone keeps dinging as more likes roll in for that damned photo.
Car window open, wind in his hair, his lips making a big kiss to the camera.
Right before he swerved.
effective
Thank you very much!
Great timing—you had me to the end and you got me at the end.
Thank you very much.
That was the purpose I had and Im very glad it worked out for you as a reader.
I really like this. I think it could be published as a billboard warning or to the highway patrol news letter or something. This story should get out there to be read be many.
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Captivating! And so very relevant…
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I like it. I like it a lot. Great story of our time.
thank you so much
Rhythm of the story is perfect. Almost as if his shortened breath was reflected in the short sentences – magic. Then the zinger. Loved it!
Thank you a lot for the rhytm compliment and glad you enjoyed it. I had tremendously good help from 101`s editor, Frances. Kudos to her.
Another excellent story from you, David. I really liked this. And like others have said, so sadly relevant for the world we live in now.
Thank you very much, Brian. Im glad you liked it.
Oof. This is a gut punch for me as my baby will be taking her driver’s test in a couple weeks. You have captured my biggest fear in 101 words.
I’m going to make her read this.
Thank you very very much.
And; Safe driving
Chilling. Great surprise in the end. Nice work David.
Thank you very much
Great suspense from beginning to end. Every word perfectly placed.
Thank you 🙂
Great story, very well done.
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So much in so little words. Definitely for a road safety / mobile phone / social media awareness campaign. Well done!
Thank you