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Just in Time

June 4, 2021 21 Comments

By Valli Henry-Boldini

Mom’s voice at the other end of the phone is anxious because her carer is late.

“Don’t worry, mom,” I say. “She’ll be there soon.”

A flustered Tracy finally arrives. “Damn traffic,” she says.

“Love you, baby girl,” I say. “Call you tomorrow.”

~

The phone rings the next day. My estranged sister’s voice is irritated. “Get here now. Nothing can save mom this time.”

Numerous emotions escape down my distraught face.

My Venice to London flight arrives at the hospital just in time.

She has waited for me, her firstborn. My hand squeezes hers tightly as she takes her last breath.

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  1. Bex says

    June 4, 2021 at 5:37 am

    So emotional, I feel like we’re being allowed to share a very raw experience right here which I think a lot can empathise with.

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    • Valli says

      June 4, 2021 at 5:41 am

      Awww… Thank you so much Bex…

      Reply
  2. T says

    June 4, 2021 at 5:41 am

    Thank you for the read . A sad ? but powerful 101 words to highlight and emotional good-bye .

    Thanks for sharing …. nicely written piece .

    Reply
    • Valli says

      June 4, 2021 at 5:43 am

      Thank you so much T…

      Reply
  3. Antonella Vianello says

    June 4, 2021 at 11:38 am

    A very sad and emotional piece well written and intimate. You must have shed quite a few tears writing it. It must have been hard to remember those moments.

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    • Valli says

      June 4, 2021 at 5:19 pm

      Thank you so much Antonella… yes, it was hard…

      Reply
  4. Gail says

    June 4, 2021 at 7:39 pm

    A Poignant moment with the desperation of hope and sadness

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    • Valli says

      June 5, 2021 at 4:37 am

      Thank you Gail…

      Reply
  5. Lesly Braun says

    June 5, 2021 at 12:42 pm

    So touching how this relationship is poignantly and vividly painted with just a few brush strokes. The mother-daughter bond is so clearly portrayed and brought to life by the mother’s holding on to be able to say good-bye. Its sparseness carries the power and beauty of poetry.

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    • Valli says

      June 5, 2021 at 12:59 pm

      Thank you so much Lesly for your kind words…

      Reply
  6. Cynthia says

    June 6, 2021 at 11:15 pm

    It’s amazing how much can be said with so few words.

    I was struck by the abruptness and, what I felt, the insensitivity of your sister in telling you that your mother was on her deathbed. There is also a part of me that is saddened by the estrangement with your sister. Our siblings share a history with us that no one else can, even if their experiences and recollections are different than our own. And they should be there to share our loss and the pain of grief.
    You also showed us how important you were to your mom, despite the distance in geography. She reached out to you in fear and then again in love. So touching and poignant.
    I salute your bravery in sharing your pain and in a story that generates emotion in so few words.

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    • Valli says

      June 7, 2021 at 12:55 pm

      Thank you so much Cynthia. Your comments are much appreciated…

      Reply
    • AJ Burchell says

      June 29, 2021 at 9:16 pm

      A wonderfully thoughtful response

      Reply
  7. L says

    June 7, 2021 at 3:01 pm

    Never something one is prepared for or can ever get used to, even harder when there is distance. I’m glad you were able to be there and you always had a special bond. A moment during a very sad time.

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    • Valli says

      June 8, 2021 at 4:31 am

      Thank you so much L…

      Reply
  8. Martina D. says

    June 8, 2021 at 11:55 am

    You moved me. There is sweetness, reassurance and pain. Few words but emotional. Thanks Valli

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    • Valli says

      June 8, 2021 at 6:07 pm

      Thank you so much for your kind words…

      Reply
  9. Linda Gaglione says

    June 9, 2021 at 5:44 pm

    I found this powerful. A great deal of emotion is conveyed in very few words. Well done Valli.

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    • Valli says

      June 10, 2021 at 10:09 am

      Thank you so much for your lovely comment Linda…

      Reply
  10. AJ Burchell says

    June 29, 2021 at 9:24 pm

    Wonderful – if sad! In just a few, succinct words I clearly saw distinct characters and felt the stab of loss! … That Venice to London Flight… mine was Melbourne to Auckland… xx

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    • Valli says

      July 18, 2021 at 7:02 am

      //Thank you AJ for you kind comment. So sorry for your loss…xox…

      Reply

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