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Killer Potenial

November 17, 2024 23 Comments

By Dan Graves

“Halt!”

I turned slowly, stifling rage. Six days, six cities, six apprehensions. “What’s the problem, officer?”

“Mental meter detected murderous ideation.” His gun projected a laser dot over my heart.

I spotted the spy box on a utility pole outside the decaying building. Inside, a prospect waited to learn if she could afford my services. Another street to avoid. New spy boxes were killing my profession.

“I’m detaining you for psychological evaluation.”

Another delay. Another lost contract.

“Stupid AI can’t make simple distinctions, reads me as a mankiller. I’m an exterminator! Roaches, fleas, bedbugs, spiders, ordinary pests. Killing is my job!”

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  1. Mary Anne Gorman says

    November 17, 2024 at 7:19 am

    It’s a great story and such truth written in it. Well written

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    • jaxson-dan says

      December 2, 2024 at 7:38 pm

      Thank you. The editor asked me if maybe the protagonist uses his exterminator job as cover for murder.

      Reply
  2. Dart humeston says

    November 17, 2024 at 7:32 am

    An accurate depiction of the near future well written.

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    • jaxson-dan says

      December 2, 2024 at 7:41 pm

      Thank you. As you might guess, I’m not completely comfortable with the way tech is trending.

      Reply
  3. Stella says

    November 17, 2024 at 8:40 am

    Brilliant! Well done!

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    • jaxson-dan says

      December 2, 2024 at 7:42 pm

      Appreciate the comment.

      Reply
  4. Tom says

    November 17, 2024 at 6:33 pm

    Great story. Let’s hope it stays as fiction

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    • jaxson-dan says

      December 2, 2024 at 7:39 pm

      Amen. Stay fiction! Stay fiction!

      Reply
  5. Barry O'Farrell says

    November 19, 2024 at 12:00 am

    This story resonates.

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    • jaxson-dan says

      December 2, 2024 at 7:50 pm

      Glad it touched a chord with you.

      Reply
  6. Faith says

    November 20, 2024 at 7:51 am

    Loved it!

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    • jaxson-dan says

      December 2, 2024 at 7:50 pm

      Makes it so worth the time it took to write to hear that.

      Reply
  7. Lisa H. Owens says

    November 20, 2024 at 9:02 am

    Killer twist! I loved it the Minority Report feel of this.

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    • jaxson-dan says

      December 2, 2024 at 7:49 pm

      You have a point. I never saw Minority Report but your comment made me read the Wikipedia article about it. Decades ago I read a ton of Sci Fi; who knows, I might have read Philip K. Dick’s novella and forgotten all about it on a conscious level. Don’t think I did, but . . .

      Reply
  8. Christie Walker says

    November 20, 2024 at 10:01 am

    Loved the twist at the end.

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    • jaxson-dan says

      December 2, 2024 at 7:57 pm

      I tried hard not to give the truth away a moment sooner than I had to.

      Reply
  9. Charlotte E Bennardo says

    November 20, 2024 at 4:52 pm

    Clever!!!

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    • jaxson-dan says

      December 2, 2024 at 7:56 pm

      The cop with his gun focused on the protagonist’s heart has perhaps more killer potential than his arrestee.

      Reply
  10. Ed Kratz says

    November 21, 2024 at 8:29 am

    Well done. Loved the twist and the comment on AI.

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    • jaxson-dan says

      December 2, 2024 at 8:19 pm

      Coming from the author of “What Timmy Didn’t Know About Monsters” I take this as a real compliment. Thanks so much.

      Reply
  11. Geraint J. says

    November 24, 2024 at 8:40 am

    Brilliant, funny, unsettling.

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    • jaxson-dan says

      December 2, 2024 at 8:13 pm

      Thanks. Appreciate the trio of adjectives.

      Reply
  12. jaxson-dan says

    December 2, 2024 at 8:21 pm

    Sorry I took so long to answer everyone. I knew “Killer Potential” was to be published near the end of November, but just remembered to check it today 12/2.

    Reply

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