By M. P Daly
A lone candle flickered amber in the dank attic. The old woman finished reading and continued her speaking of harsh foreign words. The pages of her book ruffled; the amber glow guttered. The din of a thousand roaring voices reverberated through the walls. There was one wish, only one, that was to stay forever young. She asked this of the silhouette now standing in the shadows, out of sight and out of light of the lone flickering candle. She fell for the lie, offered her soul; the demon snatched it and slithered away. A lone candle flickered, the dank attic empty.
Nice job. Loved the atmosphere and the wish – fulfilled but not as intended. Watch for what -and how- you wish.
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This story creates a scene with few words and it is very effective.
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Very atmospheric. Well done.
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It’s hard to revisit an old story and make it work. You just did. Good job.
But I do wish that for once the seller tricks the devil and comes out on top. Anyone?
Thank you very much. Maybe I’ll go for a sequel lol.
Great little Gothic style story – could imagine the scene perfectly.