By Prospero Dae
One cloudy and listless day eager Elita had a confrontation with meticulous Marcello, but there was no way to make sense of the stinging string of words that came from Marcello’s mustachioed mouth; furthermore, Elita wondered why she had latterly been prevailed upon to perform the equivalent of latrine duty, yet with the insatiable force of a maelstrom the question swirled in her mind, and her dignified dream of being at the helm of the company perished, till, and this was quite unexpected, Marcello offered her a directorship with the explanation that she had always been, despite everything, the chosen one.
Simply perfect!
I thought you’d find this one to your taste.
101 word sentence.
Yes, and perhaps our hosts should have called themselves 101words_which_normally_entails_three_or_more_sentences.org
Enjoyed this. You have a nice writing style. I would have liked you to narrow your scope to make your story more complete. By trying to cover so much ground in only 101 words, I feel like you missed the opportunity to tell us more about Elita’s thoughts and emotions during her career roller coaster ride. Look forward to reading more from you.
Thanks for your comment, DeRicki. I quite agree with your assessment. Elita was sidestepped by the formalistic demands the author imposed on himself: to wit, start and finish with the word ‘one,’ write the piece in ‘one’ sentence, and, of course, do it all in ‘one’ hundred and ‘one’ words.
Great story Prospero as you took us through the range of emotion that Elita felt as Marcello put her through the paces – climbing the ladder has its challenges. I totally get it and awesome writing!
Thank you Mary. The only thing missing is a vainglorious sunset, and I was hoping that you could paint one, thereby infusing some melancholy ocean, let’s say the Atlantic in between tempests, with fiery colors.
A bit of a stretch to get everything in, but I was pleasantly surprised by the ending. (And so was Elita) Nice…
A bit of a stretch to get everything in… Yes, I had the same problem! Thank you, Sue.
You put so much thought into your characters and writing. I love it! Nicely written.
Thank you, Rachel.