By Cat Wild
The phone rang behind Molly.
“What?”
So much for the quiet car.
“Wait, say again. I can’t hear you.”
This was in a slightly louder voice, Molly noticed.
“Oh, no. When?”
“Where are you? I can be home in forty-five minutes.”
The woman’s voice broke slightly.
“Was anyone with Dad?”
“I’ll be there as soon as I can.”
Molly relaxed, anticipating some much-needed quiet. And then the woman started a new conversation.
“It’s me. She just called. I’m going there now.”
“Yeah, he’s dead.”
There was a pause, then:
“Me too. I’ll see you soon. I can’t believe we did it.”
This is a great day for surprise endings–and yours really caught me unawares! A real Winner!
Thank you! I’m so glad you liked it. Thanks for reading my story and for leaving a comment.
Truly amazing how much was captured in this wonderful story. I want to read more!
Thank you! I want to write more! Ha.
Fun. I keep trying to imagine all the back story.
Excellent. There’s a really good back story percolating…
Good cliffhanger at the end. It makes me want to know more.
Thank you. A longer story is percolating, so you might know more at some point.
I love the successful use of the one-sided conversation device.
Thank you. I struggle with dialogue, so it was both fun and challenging to write this story.
Really chilling! Please write more xx
Thank you! And yes, I will definitely write more. Just try and stop me!
Love it Cat–tugging at the right moments and times–hope you keep writing 🙂