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Sea Specter

May 17, 2016 10 Comments

Sea Specter
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“Take the plunge!” they shout.

I leapt, expecting the water to cradle me in fluid arms. I didn’t know how cruel mother ocean was. She shattered my bones and sucked me down deep, where cold blue crushed me like a thousand anvils, binding me to a rocky grave where I must watch the weak fall prey to the cunning—an eternal reminder of my own folly.

A box jellyfish twines luminescent tentacles around a shrimp, sucking it into a gelatinous gut. The jelly is clear; I watch acidic venom slowly digest shrimp in the same way the sea is digesting me.

By Sara Codair

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  1. LearaWrites says

    May 17, 2016 at 9:03 am

    Vivid imagery!

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  2. molliejoyrushmeyer says

    May 17, 2016 at 10:57 am

    Ooh, I love this! Great descriptions and metaphor!

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  3. Bobby Warner says

    May 17, 2016 at 11:24 am

    A fantasy, yet I got the feeling that “I am here, watching.” Good job, Sara.

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  4. Tom Hadrava says

    May 17, 2016 at 11:48 am

    Perfect choice of words… Clear and cold and frightening, like the “mother sea” herself… Thanks, Sara!

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  5. Kerry E.B. Black says

    May 17, 2016 at 5:49 pm

    Well done, indeed!

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  6. Sara says

    May 18, 2016 at 4:14 am

    Thank you for all the kind words!

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  7. Daisy Warwick says

    May 18, 2016 at 11:10 am

    I really enjoyed this piece Sara, It was very vivid and I loved the line with the anvils.

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  8. Sheila M. Good, Author says

    May 18, 2016 at 5:37 pm

    Loved your description. The imagery was so vivid, I found it unsettling. Well done.

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  9. dimitriosotis says

    June 25, 2016 at 8:22 pm

    loved the rich description. I personally think finishing with that literal closer (“…the same way the sea is digesting me.”) was un-needed and detracted from the nebulous image-story you’d created. let the reader figure it out?

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  10. sueannporter1 says

    June 30, 2016 at 11:22 am

    I loved this story, and the ending.

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