By Anna Hallett
I yelled. You scratched your ear. Maybe my screams were a draft that tickled your lobe.
I tossed the papers off your desk. You blamed it on the open window.
I danced around the room, twirling my skirt. You assumed the blur was the shadow of oak leaves blowing in front of the streetlight.
I stomped up and down the hallway. You thought it was the creak of an old house.
I flickered the lights as you watched Sunday football. You believed it was a dying bulb and replaced it.
What does a woman have to do to get your attention?
What a gem! Congratulations
Thank you!
Had me pinned! World class.
Thank you!
Really loved that, thanks for writing it!
So glad you liked it. Thank you!
Sounds like a spooky ghost for Halloween…
Thanks!
“ghost” could replace “woman”
It sure could! Thanks!
The woman could be a ghost…but it’s funnier if she isn’t. Good story either way!
Thank you!
I never saw that ending coming! A funny and lively story 🙂 Well done
Thank you! I’m glad the little twist worked.
An interesting and nice story.
Thanks so much!
i thought this would be a ghost story. so much better with that ending 🙂
Thank you! I am glad you liked it.
I really dig this. It took me a moment to get it, which worked here. Well written. I love a piece that makes me go, “Ahhhhhh,” when it clicks. And I like that you invite the reader to ponder the relationship between these two characters. Well done!
Thank you! I am so glad it gave you that “Ahhhhh” moment.
Excellent! I really enjoyed that.
Thank you!!
Next stop the fuse box I think. 😉 Well crafted.
Great idea! Thank you!
What a wonderful story these few words told me. Fine work
Thank you, Jim!
Clever, well- written. A pleasure.
Thank you, Liz.
Indeed! Thanks for the chuckle. 🙂
I am so glad it made you laugh. Thank you!
Brilliant! A clever tale with an “a-ha” ending. Great fun!
Thank you! I am glad you liked it.
I loved this – the ending made me giggle! Thank you.
Thank you! I am so glad it made laugh.
Great story!
Thank you!
This is such a cool story, the ending was the perfect way to tie it all together. So much description in so few words.
Thank you, KC!
HELLO Anna,
Very well written. Captures the frustrations of the narrator; quite a graphic metaphor for a lover seeking attention from their disinterested beloved.
A twist occurred to me (doesn’t good writing engender fresh thought for other writers???)
I envisioned the narrator attempting to conjure the spirit of a departed loved one.
Very nicely done,
Cathryn
I really like your idea! Thanks for reading my story and for sharing your idea.
Lovely! Such a subtly crafted double layer, that it works both as a ghost story and as your average marriage story.
Thank you! That is exactly what I was going for.
HA! Wonderful!
Thank you!! Glad you liked it.