By John Holmes
I hadn’t written too much about myself online. However, minutes into our first meeting, I opened up like a ripped bean bag.
I talked about Mother’s health, the second wife issues, Alan’s problems at school, my attempts to find employment, the debts and the unfortunate fight with the neighbour.
Clare had listened carefully, nodded compassionately, and reached across and placed her hand gently on mine. I felt the warmth of a woman who would always support me. A second meeting was arranged.
I have been sitting here for 30 minutes, sipping at my cold latte and pondering why she might be late.
Ha, ha. Perfectly done. And I liked “opened up like a ripped bean bag”.
He’s certainly ‘bean’ suffering!
Thanks for the comment.
A complete, clever and convincing story painted in so few – beautifully written- words. Great read to start this Thursday. Well done!
Happy Thursday. Glad it hit the spot.
Haha perfect
I like the story and the way it is written. Now let me tell you my problems.
I’m all ears.
Don’t let your coffee go cold.
It feels like a totally true autobiographical story. Well done!
Haha. Happily married- never swiped left or right.
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Wonderful and gripping for such a short story. Great written words and I loved the speed of the movement of the concerns. I imagined the human meeting to be that you didn’t take a breath. Really good writing
Thanks – I was trying to tell a story where the reader is the only character who has the real facts; and the main guy doesn’t see them at all.
Great job of leaving the story “unfinished” letting the reader infer what happened.
Nicely done!
Thank you.
It’s left that way because I don’t know the ending! ?
I just love this story! Perfectly written in so few words.
Thank you. Glad you enjoyed it and were willing to comment.
More than enjoyed….
Excellent ?
More than enjoyed….
Excellent ?
More like a spiked latter. methinks. Clever.
This is really nice.