By David Everly
I walk on the beach at sunrise, the sand wet and packed beneath me, squishing up between bare toes. The gentle wave’s rhythmic advances sweep over my feet in chilly, refreshing surges. There’s a light but steady breeze blowing in from the sea as the rosy pink and purples, in silent explosion, paint the distant horizon. So easy to believe in a loving creator at times like this. The pink and purple canvas soon morphs into a warmer, friendlier tangerine. There’s a bottle floating on the tide. I finish my morning prayer and read the note inside. It says, “You’re welcome.”
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A small, neat, heart-warming story of thankfulness, and acknowledgement of same. A winner.
Pretty imagery and a note of appreciation.
A lovely scene. I would have preferred an ending with a tsunami and a death toll of thousands, not because I’m morbid, but because I’m a fan of Voltaire’s Candide. But I’m also not a huge fan of 101-word story twists, so found your message in a bottle something of a relief.
Currently, I’m reading deeply about Creation so found your story inspiring, in its (surface) simplicity, touching what it reached for. Rae Everette. You achieved it!
Really nice pace and imagery. Very thoughtful, and with a great message (pun not initially intended, but there it is). Great job!