By Cathy Cade
Candy floss dissolves in your mouth as the smell of burnt sugar gives way to fried onions.
Time for hot doughnuts and burgers when you’re shivering bone-deep, waiting for him to finish work.
Jostling through screams, laughter, music, bells, hucksters’ cries, and flashing lights, you spot him dodging the bumper cars. Music swells; cars jerk forward.
At the edge, a girl smiles. His hand takes hers.
You remember its warmth, holding yours. He meets your gaze.
An eyebrow lifts. A shoulder shrugs. That heart-stopping smile is confident of forgiveness.
And you would forgive, if only you knew where he’ll be tomorrow.
Really captures the atmosphere of the fairground and teenage love.
You captured the essence of being a teenager so succinctly. Great job!
Amazing how vivid the scene and the characters despite so few words used! I can see it all in my minds eye!
I love that the “showcased” senses are taste and smell. Sounds play an important role also.
Beautifully constructed and evocative. Well done.
Excellent job efficiently immersing us in a fair/carnival setting. Great use of scent and taste details.
Good job… enjoyed the read … kudos …