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The Last Night

November 22, 2022 7 Comments

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Candy floss dissolves in your mouth as the smell of burnt sugar gives way to fried onions.

Time for hot doughnuts and burgers when you’re shivering bone-deep, waiting for him to finish work.

Jostling through screams, laughter, music, bells, hucksters’ cries, and flashing lights, you spot him dodging the bumper cars. Music swells; cars jerk forward.

At the edge, a girl smiles. His hand takes hers.

You remember its warmth, holding yours. He meets your gaze.

An eyebrow lifts. A shoulder shrugs. That heart-stopping smile is confident of forgiveness.

And you would forgive, if only you knew where he’ll be tomorrow.

By Cathy Cade

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  1. Kay Lesley Reeves says

    November 22, 2022 at 12:19 pm

    Really captures the atmosphere of the fairground and teenage love.

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  2. Kelly Jeanne says

    November 22, 2022 at 1:51 pm

    You captured the essence of being a teenager so succinctly. Great job!

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  3. julie dron says

    November 22, 2022 at 9:50 pm

    Amazing how vivid the scene and the characters despite so few words used! I can see it all in my minds eye!

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  4. Veronique says

    November 23, 2022 at 7:59 am

    I love that the “showcased” senses are taste and smell. Sounds play an important role also.

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  5. Doug Jacquier says

    November 23, 2022 at 5:20 pm

    Beautifully constructed and evocative. Well done.

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  6. Kristie says

    November 25, 2022 at 9:41 am

    Excellent job efficiently immersing us in a fair/carnival setting. Great use of scent and taste details.

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  7. Valli says

    November 25, 2022 at 11:42 am

    Good job… enjoyed the read … kudos …

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