By JenHQ
His thighs protest against the speed of his sprint. The pounding footsteps of his attackers are a distance behind him but he knows they’re gaining ground. Sweat rolls from his forehead, stinging his eyes; his lungs gasp for air.
He alters his path, hoping their pursuit will falter.
He looks up to find one of them standing in front of him, glaring.
He readies himself and takes aim. He says a silent prayer and then fires a perfect shot. The scowling man dives. He never had a chance.
The soccer ball wedges into the top right corner of the net. Goal!
Very creative use of the sport of football to capture the essence of predator versus prey. Well done!
Oh yes! Football is life! I’m planning a Nano piece about football. If you’re doing Nano, JenHQ, do friend me.
Just looked at your title. You meant pursuit, not persuit.
Some sports produce a killer instinct.
Well done.
What’s with the title? Who are the slush readers..editor????
I loved the story. I didn’t get the title, but I am guessing the misspelling of pursuit was intentional?
Great beginning and full of action right up to the unexpected ending. Great story! (spelling blooper aside)
Thanks Debbie. Seriously it really was just a blooper. Not intended as a secret meaning and it certainly doesn’t reflect poorly on the editors. Whoops. My bad. Thanks to you all for the positive feedback. 🙂
Well done! I like stories that use one set of emotions (in this case, an action/adventure pursuit) and then re-contextualize them in a different setting (in this case, a soccer game). Great job building up the tension — because, really, it may be just a game, but when you’re the one playing, it doesn’t feel like “just a game”!
nice twist. didn’t see it coming
The title of this piece was updated for spelling. Thanks to all the eagle-eyed readers who reached out. -Editor at 101 Words