Juan gasped as he trekked up the wooded incline to the main road. Passing cars ignored his outstretched thumb. Fighting for breath, he jogged along the roadside.
Rattling metal and a growling motor thundered behind him. Juan flinched as the speeding truck nicked his arm and rumbled past him.
The truck U-turned in the road and raced towards him. Juan recognized the truck and plunged into the weeds on the shoulder to avoid collision.
The breaks squealed and the truck halted.
Grinding gears: a quick clunk, and the truck reversed as Mr. Jones took one more swipe at his daughter’s boyfriend.
Good hook to get the story started. Suspenseful throughout and great ending. I would like to read more of these flash insights from you.
Thank you b !! This is my very first one with the 101 Words family!!
Thank you b.! This is my very first one with the 101 Words family.
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I too enjoyed your story and was surprised by the ending.. Great job and I look forward to more of your work.–Jim
Thank you James!!!
Wonderful twist ending. I can truly say that I didn’t see that coming. Welcome to the Family of 101 Words writers. Glad to have you aboard.
Thank you Bobby!
SueAnn,
” ….he trekked up the wooden incline”.
Wouldn’t It make more sense if he have scrambled back down where the truck couldn’t follow him through the woods and, hopefully, outrun Daddy.
Welcome….?
Hmmm. Well let me think about that…but Juan was trying to get to the main highway to hopefully catch a ride home. Maybe another story? Bwahahaha
Hard to do if you’ve been run over by Pa’s truck……..
Maybe she gets a new boyfriend….
breaks is brakes? 🙂
You are correct! Breaks is brakes. How embarrassing, especially since I grew up in a garage!!
Great ending! : )
I’m not sure about, “speeding truck nicked his arm…”
“nick” to me, means, “to hit or injure slightly.’
How would a speeding truck be able to do this?
Mad skillz.
I thoroughly enjoyed this story from wooded incline beginning through the nicks and breaks and thru to the final swipe.
If there is illogic and unreasonableness, it just adds to the character of the text.
Really well done!
Thank you Smila!