By Stephanie Cheng E-Laine
The night was cold and the road unlighted. Clouds shrouded the moon, which heightened my sense of unease. My heart thumped harder and I stepped up my pace. From the corner of my eye, I glimpsed a girl by the tree, hiding in shadows, coatless despite the chill. I called, “Are you okay?” She turned toward me, her face white as a sheet. “Never better.” Her voice sent chills down my spine as the frigid wind brushed against my cheeks. I closed my coat, walked faster, turned a corner, caught sight of the same girl hiding again, face pale in moonlight.
A sense of threat and menace throughout this story. It also leaves the reader wanting to know more.
Is there a story here?
Consider deleting this comment, Howard. How rude. Do you have anything published here? And if so, I’d like to read it and make public comments on yours.
Nice work, could be foreword for a longer piece.
creepy! great ambience.
A very spooky piece – definitely makes you want to know more!
Nice imagery… makes me want to know what happens next… but that’s the beauty of this kind of story… we imagine the end… well done…
I love all the suspense building! The escalation of creepiness is great!