Should she have made a cake?
She glances at her watch. Only two more hours and still so much to do. She polishes the table and applies a fresh table cloth, cleans the window sills, dusts the books on the shelf, and rearranges the flowers. He must appreciate her efforts! Toaster, water kettle, and microwave are spotless. Everything must be in perfect shape for him! She vacuums the carpet and swipes the tiles.
The doorbell rings. Her heart beats faster.
“Good morning!” he says. Quickly he checks the gas meter then nods goodbye.
Behind him the door closes with a sigh.
Sadly relatable for many. A great story.
Cathy Cade says
That’s very good. Well told.
Dan Vasey says
Maybe write a followup from the meter reader’s POV? Good job.
nice idea, will give it a try!
Mary E Falkner says
So pathetic… yes, a cake might have helped… or it might not have been touched.
Cassandra Hamilton says
I like how you told this story: the majority of text details the heroine’s preparation for her visitor and in three sentences you show the visitor, his lack of interest in the host and the story’s resolution. We feel as the heroine does: he went through us like a burst of elusive wind. Very well done!
danke! Fortsetzung folgt 🙂
Leif Gregersen says