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Total Eclipse

January 18, 2018 7 Comments

Total Eclipse
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“Use your glasses or the light will damage your eyes.” Dad pulled the glasses down from my head. “That’s the moon blocking the sunlight. Soon we’ll be in total darkness.”

“Like nighttime?” I asked.

“Precisely.”

“Like when Bobby died?”

“What?” Dad blinked like he didn’t hear.

“Mama said when Bobby died, there was total darkness.”

“That’s different.” Dad swallowed. “She wasn’t talking about sunlight. She was talking about…mood. Our sadness made it dark.”

I watched the light fade, the sky turning from powder blue to inky black.

“So will it be like this forever now? Will it always be night?”

By Dakota Canon

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  1. rauthor68 says

    January 18, 2018 at 7:21 am

    Wow, Dakota; terrific story, and good fodder for a novel or a short story depending on what happens next, or what took place when Bobby died.

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    • Dakota Canon says

      January 18, 2018 at 10:55 am

      Thank you, kind sir! 🙂

      Reply
  2. Jen HQ says

    January 18, 2018 at 12:35 pm

    Lovely story. The last two lines invoked a sadness. It’s a moment in time but the reader understands this is an ongoing event for this family. Very well done!

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  3. MCGENO says

    January 18, 2018 at 6:29 pm

    Like when Scott died…..? Well done, I relate.

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  4. Bobby Warner says

    January 18, 2018 at 6:41 pm

    I agree with Author 68. This one begs to be written as a much longer story. Good as far as it goes…there is just potentially so more there to work with…

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  5. Alyson Faye says

    January 19, 2018 at 1:11 pm

    touching and well written, lovely

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  6. Joy Thomas says

    January 22, 2018 at 5:23 am

    Great story. Very touching.

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