By K Brundage
She was falling scarcely before she knew it, before her feet felt the stumble and before her eyes saw the danger. She fell until she was under the surface, under the water which soaked her clothes and which caressed her body. She tried to sputter but couldn’t, her arms moving slowly around her in the soft, creeping water. For a moment she was still, and she imagined herself melting into the water, absorbed by the creek. When at last her feet touched the bottom she pounced, rushing towards the surface, slicing through the calm current, until she was no longer under.
That was really good. A roller coaster of reactions and emotions in just a few words, all very believable and evocative. Very nicely done!