By BAM
As my car flipped down the mountain, I thought, “What went wrong?”
Roads were drenched with hours-old rain puddles, and I just had to drift toward the curve, feel the rush. A foolish maneuver.
No time to know what I could’ve—
“Thump.”
It’s always afterward there are moments for what-if—
“Clank.”
The way glass shattered, nibbling at my skin as the ceiling to my Volvo concaved, embraced me while the world spun; my odds of survival seemed slim—
“Wham,” said my rolling coffin as it crashed down toward my final resting place.
At least I’d remembered to turn off the stove.
Famous last words. Very realistic. Never did know what exactly happened in a car crash.
That’s exactly where I was going with this story.
Aptly suggests a calm acceptance of one’s fate.
My hope is in the end, most people feel acceptance.
Unplug the iron would have been better. Not many people leave the stove on. All in all, it was a great little piece, Allan. Proud of you.
Okay. Great advice. Glad you stopped by.
Nice work! Always good to read your writing!
DC
Quite a compliment!
Loved it! The last line is priceless. Good job
Happy to know such a talented writer is reading my work.
Great story, felt like I was there. Glad I wasn’t!
You felt like you were there? Well, at least you’re safe and sound now.
Just like a writer to provide details to his demise! Nice going!
Haha. You’ve got a good point.
You’ve done it again. Extraordinary work, the words came together nicely giving the feel of this happening. I love it!
Great of you to stop by. I’m enjoying your work as well.
Love it!
Cool deal!
Gratious I am for such a provocative read on an end of life accident scenario.
Well, I do declare. (Cackles nefariously.)
Good stuff! Nice last line.
Means a lot that you think so.
Wow, what a story!
Wow, what a nice comment!
So real. Maybe the best depiction of the thoughts you have when time slows down in that moment when your life flashes before your eyes.
Your observation is much appreciated.
Well done. The things you wrote and the ones you didn’t write. Brilliant.
Knowing what information to leave out is the most difficult part for me. That’s why I like microfiction. It gives a chance to see what information is definitely needed and what must be cut. Terrific practice for larger pieces later.
Well done. The things you wrote and the ones left unsaid. Brilliant.