By Simon Hole
The coach stared at the sports section. A moral victory; that’s what they were calling last night’s two point loss to the nation’s number one team. The coach crumbled the paper into a ball and snorted in disgust. He knew moral victories weren’t reflected in the standings. He knew moral victories wouldn’t take this team to the next level. But, by God, he knew these young men and he knew what it would take. He placed his whip on the passenger seat, patted it lovingly, and drove to the practice gym, a hint of a smile slowly spreading across his face.
Hmm, not sure I’d want him for a coach, but enjoyed the story.
Thanks. Unfortunately, I modeled him on my football coach from 45 years ago. He never used a whip, but I bet he thought about it.
Well I sure didn’t see the whip coming! It gives the story fascinating depth–it could be read as a summary of 700 years of Spartan history. What starts out so rigorous and pure descends finally into decadent s&m. The two modes do seem to be History’s inseparable bunk-buddies.
What’s the old saying? Something like: “Drastic situations call for drastic measures!” However, I’d hate to be this coach when the lawsuits start hurtling his way! Good surprise ending.
Interesting micro-flash with a surprise ending! Nice work.
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